treyj Posted September 18, 2008 Posted September 18, 2008 So here is the essay I just wrote for english, I chose marching band just because it has had such a profound impact on my life. I'm no writer, but i just thought id share it Spotlights Those horrible, sizzling hot days of summer band. Rehearsing drill until your legs burn like someone is about to rip them off. Spending one hour on a simple forward marching fundamental. Doing marching show segments over and over until you are positively sick of the band director saying Quote
treblemaker Posted September 18, 2008 Posted September 18, 2008 Let me know what you get on that. Quote
whitewing09 Posted September 18, 2008 Posted September 18, 2008 (edited) You need to take out all of the contractions! Some of the phrasing could be revised, but it's not bad. Edited September 18, 2008 by whitewing09 Quote
treyj Posted September 18, 2008 Author Posted September 18, 2008 whitewing09 said: You need to take out all of the contractions! Some of the phrasing could be revised, but it's not bad. thanks. yeah this is jsut a rough draft. and no kidding i really really hate writing. but band is fun to write about :] haha Quote
radchad Posted September 22, 2008 Posted September 22, 2008 Great topic. Technically, it's eh. [/english&musicmajornitpicking] Quote
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